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The liquefied flames engulf me –
my mind, body, and soul,
As I crawl through the shadows
hiding from all those misguided ghosts
I can't handle my
(angry, desperate, frustrated)
heart
For in there lies coldfire,
burning and freezing me
simultaneously,
so it can intensify the pain
I want to cry
(I want to weep)
I want to shout
(I want to scream)
I want to…but I'm tired
I'm tired of hearing half-assed truths
being thrown haphazardly around her,
around him, around me, around them,
around we, around us.
'Cause life isn't perfect
and lines get old fast,
but eventually everyone knows that
(Or will at least say they do)
Everyone knows about:
broken hopes, broken dreams,
broken homes by broken means,
falling apart,
inside out,
right side up
A kaleidoscopic nightmare that will
swallow you bit by bit
because it enjoys watching
your slow, slow descent.
Breathe in, breathe out,
forget the headache
Breathe in, breathe out,
bite your tongue hard
Say nothing to no one,
they don't care at all
Say nothing to no one,
no need for alarm
Remember the smiles,
remember the laughs,
and hold unto them tightly,
those sky-blue memories
Search deep into your pockets
of sweet childhood,
find the lovable trinkets
that will help pull you through
Remember the smiles,
remember the laughs,
before the coldfire within
turns them to smoke-grey ash.
This is a piece I wrote on impulse with slight edits.
I really like the idea of having a "coldfire heart", which is how I describe mine.
It's either too cold or too passionate.
To this day, I'm hoping this is a weakness and a strength but unfortunately, it's been one over the other, too often.
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My comment for Rieal-Dragonsbane's "Fallen Star" [link]
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* After reading the poem, what is your impression of the term "coldfire heart"?
* Does the spoken word element portray itself, despite the fact that you're reading it?
* Is there a smooth flow from stanza to stanza?
* The overall aspect to the poem is a bit chaotic, do you feel as if that helped intensify the emotions being portrayed?
* Any other comments ? (:
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first off loved it and i almost hear music behind it like it's a song when i read it, now feedback ^^
- after reading my impression of "coldfire heart" would be, so hard to put into words, but hate, anger and other emotions that is so hot and cruel with a coating of of emotionless cruelty.... make sense?
-yes it does when i read it i hear the word spoken loud but when their (in between these) i hear them softly spoken almost whispered with desperation
-there is a nice flow between stanzas
-i wouldn't say it's chaotic but it has great emotional intensity
-AWESOME!!!!!!
- after reading my impression of "coldfire heart" would be, so hard to put into words, but hate, anger and other emotions that is so hot and cruel with a coating of of emotionless cruelty.... make sense?
-yes it does when i read it i hear the word spoken loud but when their (in between these) i hear them softly spoken almost whispered with desperation
-there is a nice flow between stanzas
-i wouldn't say it's chaotic but it has great emotional intensity
-AWESOME!!!!!!